by Lauren Howell
Kindle Edition & Paperback Available through Amazon
I found the story to be exciting enough to read it from beginning to end in a very short while. The story itself was good - and I enjoyed it.
The idea of a girl suddenly being asked to join a boy on an adventure who claims to be a dragon caught my attention - add in Atlantis and a magical world, and I was willing to give it a shot. It was a fun story that hummed along at a good pace so you stayed around in spite of the many grammar errors and abrupt scene changes, unless you really get offended by editing issues .... such as the dwarves going to rescue the dwarves (instead of the elves).
There were also a lot of spots that left me shaking my head ... she got dropped into the ocean in the middle of a storm and still had her back pack with the dragons shoes when she woke up on the shore? Wouldn't it have drug her under and drowned her? or maybe have been dropped to the bottom of the ocean?
There was also a lot of repetition of comments ... they get to a stream, and one gets a drink and then the next one gets a drink and then the next one, and then they all get a drink.... .... there are several spots like that.
But the ending left me with a frown ... I didn't mind the abrupt ending or the sudden shift to weeks after (although shifts like that should have had a chapter break - or a page break – or dots - to warn us that a scene change or time jump was coming - I could sometimes get several pages of confusion before I finally tripped on a clue that made me realize that we had changed scenes. Perhaps this is a Kindle formatting issue.... ) BUT ... they are setting up for a big war and the whole battle is so anti-climatic ... Like being excited to go to a hot air balloon show and finding out the balloons are not going to get off the ground.
It has a lot of potential. It is a great story, just needs a tad more polishing for readability.
Genre/Theme: Fantasy – Dragons, Atlantis, Parallel Demisional Travel
Reading Level: Teen
There is some attraction between two characters who turn out to be brother and sister. From reading other reviews, this did bother some people.